The first person that I hate

Today, Im going to talk about a person that I hate. Is a girl and she was in my class in the last year of the high school. She is eighteen years old, is from another country and has a curly hair, big mouth and brown eyes. She think that is very nice and all the people love her. This girl that I can't see because make me feel angry and sometimes very bad with myself think that is a good person and doesn't make bad things or despise other people only for their aspect. I know that hate is a feeling very bad but I can't avoid it.
So, I've never hate anybody until this girl make me feel the hate.

PEER RESPONSE FOR ELENA HERNÁNDEZ
BY AMALIA HERNÁNDEZ

Dear Elena, I've just read your text and I think that it is a good description, because I can feel your hate. However, there are some things that If I were you I would change.
At first I think that you shouldn't start with now because it is a very direct form.
Secondly, I recuon that the sentence "despise other people because of their aspect" doesn't hear well so that I would try to change it.
An Finally I believe that you can say "I have never hate anybody until this girl make me feel the hate" instead of "I have never hate anybody in my life but this girl has won the position of the person that I hate"
By all means, good work and you have get that I hate that girl too.